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Post by Mr. Hendrickson™ on Nov 18, 2004 15:13:04 GMT -5
Hes a lost dog in your eyes Staring out the window wondering why Teardrops to raindrops upon my mind Head hung low and to his side
Love lost soul across the mist of the know No needs the saddness of the glow Raindropped soaked being hearts done seeing Wasteful mind of the oneless bleeding
No one knows the lost dogs healings Sent in the thick of the loveless seething Better to be than not to be needing So let it go to the lost dogs meaning
Onceans gone cold with his streaming tears Clouds formed around his hidden fears Rainbows gone grey with his saddened face Head hung low from his own disgrace
Lost done alone on its own Sent wondering into the darkness of his home Howless voice of the oneless most N o one sees the unloved host
Memerable pictures of a sunsets meaning Standing alone with no on listening Stories of the faithful healing Tear drops upon the faceless feeling
Lost dog of a love left stealing Wrapped up in his own selfless dreaming Forgiveness is just another heartless feeling To the one lost dog and his life of no meaning
-This sucks I know but what can make it better?
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Post by BlackWidow on Nov 19, 2004 6:14:26 GMT -5
Sorry..but I quite like it..its abstract and they way it twists is pretty cool. A few spelling errors but what the hey I really like the last verse..I dunno BM.Its different and it appeals.If anyone else can see something to change it..I dont see what it would be.Talk about unique *thumbs up* By the way..sorry Ive not been round much.The manor has picked up and Ive been flat out. This boards looking pretty cool too..Nice job! Chenoa
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Post by Mr. Hendrickson™ on Nov 19, 2004 9:51:59 GMT -5
Thank you. I feel like its not flowing as well as some of my other songs but I think it will be good with a good chorus. The beat I had for it was awesome and now I forgot it.
Anyways dont worry about not being here as I am not here as much but its all good as long as you are here sometimes.
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Post by BlackWidow on Nov 24, 2004 23:38:34 GMT -5
Well pick up the guitar and get to finding the tune you lost.. ok..maybe change raindropped to rainsoaked something..about all I could find.I been over it a lot and I still like its uniqueness
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Post by Mr. Hendrickson™ on Nov 25, 2004 23:11:35 GMT -5
Thanks again Sharon for your kind words. It does mean a lot to me.
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