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Post by Låuŗєn on Jul 25, 2003 22:25:16 GMT -5
This was a poem I wrote a long long time ago when I was extremely depressed. I finally found it in that old pile of papers. It doesnt have much rhyming rythm, and it needs work but here it is.
NOTHINGNESS
Now I will tell you What I have done For you All those tears I cried They were for you I tried relieving I tried Believing but after all the things I did Your still Leaving
I told you All of my feelings But you pushed them aside You never hear me When I cry You would'nt be there If I was to die I told the truth Only the truth Your still stuck In your lie
Have I not Done enough? Have I not given my love? Even if I do'nt Try hard enough You do'nt either That makes us the same That makes us both the ones To blame
You are falling From me But you do'nt care When I was on the floor Crawling You were'nt there Yet still for you I have always been there But you still Just do'nt care
Wake up Stand up Get back To reality Pull me out Of the dark Save me From this insanity Pull me back Before I reach the bottom Of this dark Nothingness
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Post by Låuŗєn on Jul 25, 2003 22:41:49 GMT -5
STEP INTO THE LIGHT
Can you see Can you believe Can you love Can you feel?
Can you breathe Can you hold Can you embrace What is real?
Can you cry Can you find Can you unwind The seal?
Are you stuck Are you fading You say your here But I'm still waiting Do you fool Do you lie Can you hear me When I cry?
Do you live Do you pray Do you see Any light?
Are you weak Are you falling Are you losing All your might?
Forget the pain Forget the rain Forget the darkness
Step into the light
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Post by .Shattered.Creation. on Jul 26, 2003 15:08:55 GMT -5
This was a poem I wrote a long long time ago when I was extremely depressed. I finally found it in that old pile of papers. It doesnt have much rhyming rythm, and it needs work but here it is. NOTHINGNESS Now I will tell you What I have done For you All those tears I cried They were for you I tried relieving I tried Believing but after all the things I did Your still Leaving I told you All of my feelings But you pushed them aside You never hear me When I cry You would'nt be there If I was to die I told the truth Only the truth Your still stuck In your lie Have I not Done enough? Have I not given my love? Even if I do'nt Try hard enough You do'nt either That makes us the same That makes us both the ones To blame You are falling From me But you do'nt care When I was on the floor Crawling You were'nt there Yet still for you I have always been there But you still Just do'nt care Wake up Stand up Get back To reality Pull me out Of the dark Save me From this insanity Pull me back Before I reach the bottom Of this dark Nothingness This poem might not have much rhyme to it, but it does have a lot of meaning. I can sort of tell that you wrote this poem about a brake up between you and your boy friend. I might be totally off though. Anyways I thought your poem was great. Oh and the last part was probable my favorite. - Tha Masta
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Post by .Shattered.Creation. on Jul 26, 2003 15:11:57 GMT -5
STEP INTO THE LIGHT Can you see Can you believe Can you love Can you feel? Can you breathe Can you hold Can you embrace What is real? Can you cry Can you find Can you unwind The seal? Are you stuck Are you fading You say your here But I'm still waiting Do you fool Do you lie Can you hear me When I cry? Do you live Do you pray Do you see Any light? Are you weak Are you falling Are you losing All your might? Forget the pain Forget the rain Forget the darkness Step into the light This was also a very good poem. I like the poems you write a lot. I guess because I can kind of relate to them. Anyways I like this poem. - Tha Masta
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Post by Låuŗєn on Jul 26, 2003 15:17:29 GMT -5
Thank u very much, I appreciate it. I should get some more poems up here soon.
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Post by .Shattered.Creation. on Jul 26, 2003 15:19:19 GMT -5
Awesome I can wait for some more.
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Post by Låuŗєn on Jul 26, 2003 16:33:13 GMT -5
Thanks, here is another one.
RESPECT
Respect Is all I want Is all I need Not to be laughed at Not to feel alone Not feel Insecure Unwanted And hated
Yet respect Is something That I have'nt gained With all the others It seems to have always Remained It never fell upon me So now My heart is Stained
Every single time You laugh at me Every single time You torment me Every single time You mock at me My heart is robbed Replaced with Anguish Anger Pain And I just ca'nt Seem to regain What I had Before you came
Leave me Alone Let me be Myself Let me feel Alive How do you find pleasure In tearing apart Someone's life?
I asked you But you did'nt listen As if all I was saying Was stolen by the wind I helped you But you did'nt care The way you treat me Just is'nt Fair
I'm not Who you think I am So give yourself the time To get to know me Enter my world Understand me Feel my sorrows Breathe into me Then you will See Then you will Stop Then you will Leave And never come back Then you will Give me Respect
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Post by .Shattered.Creation. on Aug 6, 2003 19:36:42 GMT -5
Nice poem DL. I don't know why no one else replied to this. You have some great poems. Like I said before can't wait until you get some more.
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Post by Låuŗєn on Aug 6, 2003 22:07:17 GMT -5
Thanks! I am glad that you like my poetry. ;D
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Post by Breakdown on Sept 4, 2003 14:08:28 GMT -5
Good Job, i like them all
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Post by Daemon Rose on Sept 4, 2003 20:18:46 GMT -5
I love poetry and I really love yours. Great job!
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Post by Låuŗєn on Sept 5, 2003 11:46:30 GMT -5
Thanks. Here is one of my ryming poems, about the death of a loved one.
Moving On
Now your finally gone I'll never again see your face I'll never see that warming smile Because its gone without a trace
I will never speak to you again Or hear your welcoming voice But now I must move one Because I have no choice
Your no longer in this world Nor will you ever be here Now I feel so alone and lost With no one to help me face my fear Where are you now? Are you distant or are you near? When I pray and cry for you Are you too far away to hear?
Although I know your gone Your presence did'nt perish I feel your soul linger in my heart It is a feeling that I cherish
But I ca'nt help missing you All those memories, love and glee Are washed away forever Coming back to haunt me Tears fill my eyes Until its too blurry to see I feel caged in my own anguish I am no longer free
Its hard to face the truth Knowing we will never be together But now I must move on Because I do'nt want to live in sadness forever
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Post by BlackWidow on Oct 18, 2004 1:42:36 GMT -5
This was[ [is] a great piece and the words read like lyrics to me.Nice job!
Widow
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